My Poem Of Grr-ness, Ducky_Quackers writes Options

Stay My Heart!

Beating far too swiftly,
burning out in the end.
It has to keep going!
It must bide its time...

Time is a luxury;
and I don't have enough.
I’m far too far away.
A star in the distance.

Distance is relative.
The world grows smaller.
Right now it's way too big.
If only I had the time…

Time‘s such a high hurdle.
If my heart could stay now;
it would have stamina
to cross the far distance.

A distance that’s growing;
until it breaks me twice.
It didn't have any meaning...
but now is not the time!

Time to behold miracles
and focus on the future
wait, please wait, just a little more
don't run too fast to Azrael

I like it

I know why you want more time, because if you die:- theres nothing for you to go back on.
The last line makes me chuckle 'dont run too fast Azrael'
Good poem

This post has been edited by JJ: Nov 25 2008, 01:20 PM

uhh jj , it wasnt about my death, more of a figurative death of the relationship, seperated from somebody that i cared a lot about...

i could care less if i died tomorrow

only because its always easier on the dead, than the living.

my refrence to death wasnt actually pointed at myself either

this girl always felt like crap after she broke up with me, it took her 3 times to get it right i guess

it was meant to tell her not to feel bad, because apparently she did it for her good

soo... yea the only death was between me and her,

not me, or her, or anybody else...

:-p

Oops im sorry i didnt know you were referring to a past memory!

im lookin at the poem in a diff way now:-

dont mind me im blonde (on the inside)...

This post has been edited by JJ: Nov 26 2008, 11:58 AM

you give me a good idea, i will explain the poem then

Stay My Heart!

Beating far too swiftly,..............im just sayin here that the relationship was amazing
burning out in the end..............and that it was too good to last and it was sorta
It has to keep going!................like we were running out of spice
It must bide its time.................i sorta wished there was 'more' to it

Time is a luxury;.....................this girl lived about 5ish hours away from me
and I don't have enough...........we didnt have much time to see eachother
I'm far too far away.................i just wanted more time, maybe we coulda fixed it
A star in the distance.

Distance is relative..................but at the same time, if we had a better foundation
The world grows smaller...........long distance really shouldnt have mattered as much
Right now it's way too big.........as it did, like we always had stuff to talk about
If only I had the time….............we just needed to hang more, it might have worked

Time's such a high hurdle..........but in the 14 months we were together
If my heart could stay now.......living so far away from eachother
it would have stamina..............we changed, and so did our view of what
to cross the far distance.........'we' were... less lovers, more like siblings

A distance that's growing;.......she couldnt take long distance it wasnt good for her
until it breaks me twice...........she broke up with me twice and came back...
It didn't have any meaning.......i dont think we ever were the same
but now is not the time!...........but i feared if i lost her like that, we couldnt be
......................................................'just friends'

Time to behold miracles...................it hurt a ton, so i was just like 'the $#!@ with that'
and focus on the future........................and we didnt talk for around a month after
wait, please wait, just a little more..........when we did i just kept telling her it was ok
don't run too fast to Azrael....................she didnt believe me tho
.......................................................she knew me like nobody else

...............................................it all turned out good in the end tho, we still
.............................................are good friends and we talk often

I get it! :- if only i read it properly and used my head

this is brilliant!

goood! i like it!